
I'm sharing my attempts at the American Sentence penned by Allen Ginsburg. Below are three drafts, all different themes. All feedback is welcome. Whether you're a poet or avid poetry read, don't fret, I have thick skin.
American Sentence
A flock of black boxes flap their wings and tuck their tails for dollars.
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Beneath blue lights I flood the floor like unstrung beads in a frenzied pour.
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Lions for lambs fall like snowflakes on frozen hills of Afghanistan.
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9 comments:
I tend not to understand much poetry, but your efforts at an "American Sentence" sound very beautiful.
Thank you, Rhapsody.
I have never attempted the American Sentence either. Yours provoke much thought! I will have to try to write some at some point!
I love these!! I have never tried this form--have never read its description until now. Looks like fun. :-) Thank you.
I never heard of this form, either, but love the image you created & the movement/sound of fallen beads...
Ah, the American Sentence... I hate to think this is the form that defines America... will have to think on that. Meanwhile, love what you've done with it, especially the third.
Irene,
I featured this form because it is unique to America. I am not arguing it defines America.
Beneath blue lights I flood the floor like unstrung beads in a frenzied pour.
I love the sentence.
Sounds like me yesterday:)
I like the rhythm of this American Sentence: "Beneath blue lights I flood the floor like unstrung beads in a frenzied pour."
But the most vivid of the lines for me is this one: "A flock of black boxes flap their wings and tuck their tails for dollars."
Great work.
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